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Need help creticking my fanfic.....
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is it good?
good ^^
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Lonley Wolf


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PostPosted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 5:06 pm    Post subject:  Reply with quote

in the story im as i am in real life i know very little becouse i havent played any of the games only watched the FF movie!!
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 10:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

yeah!!! oh, Rene, i LOVED IT SO MUCH!!! it will need some work to be an actuall book, but you have the basic down and some of the detailes!!it would make a really start line(plot) for a new manga!!1
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 06, 2007 2:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

OHHHH!!!!!!!!! REALLY ZOEY-CHAN !!!!!!!! THANK YOU!!! ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^

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PostPosted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 10:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

im screwed..........
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 19, 2007 12:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow...okay...where did that come from??
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 19, 2007 9:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

my story.....its screwed....on the comp a virus got it (dad) and its been deleted i wrote like 2 more chapters since i last posted the story.....piece of shit....
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 11:57 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

gotcha. that's why I got you a jump drive for christmas!!!
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 5:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

i know but.... ._. feeling depressed now....going to talk to kobatcha for assistence she knows a manga that i want to script off of (hopefully)
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 12:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

hey wren (^^) i thought it was AWSOME!!!!!!!!!
it sounds just like something a profecional would write!
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 5:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you I'm glad you liked it so far!! -^^-
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 07, 2008 4:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok I 'm going to need some help figuring out the rest of my fanfic. any ideas?
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's not bad for a fun self-fulfillment fantasy. I question why the main character realized the parallel universe angle so quickly (I also read a lot of fantasy but it would not have occurred to me right away) and there is an odd tense shift near the end, when 'I' becomes 'Rene'. And why would the school call the cops on a girl who seems to be an excellent student, over an infraction that seems rather minor?

Just some points to to think about. Are you still working on this story?
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

She hasn't posted anything in a while, but we are all wanting to read more...
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 7:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I always thought that if a student was running away from school grounds that they would call the cops...Yea I'm kinda bad about changing "persons" and I'm not really working on it right now I have to see what happens afterwords because.... <.<  >.>  I had all that in a day-dream  (yea I have elaborite ones)  and it's hard for me to type fast enough to keep up with whats going on...But thaks for the cratique.  ^^


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